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In memorium A pal o mine asked me to write a poem for her friend who lost her hubby a few years back to comemorate his passing. The first one i don't like the repitition of "i know you're dead" (said in exasperation- like i know you're dead! Now stop reminding me) but if i just remove them the poem needs an ending and it needs work anyhoo.So any suggestions would be appreciated. The second one i think may be too sentimental. What d'yer think? I hear you laughing at the joke in my head (i know you're dead, i know you're dead) You nod and smile at my remark unsaid (i know you're dead, i know you're dead) i turn to you though you are not there Your absence smarts but i shall not care Life and love are seldom fair You gave me all you had to share You're still in my heart and still in my head (i know you're dead, i know you're dead) I see your footprints in my lonesome tread (i know you're dead, I know you're dead!) Love is my memory of you The form of you may be gone But your strength still holds me upright. There is warmth and comfort in remembering A life so generous and bright. My reward is having known you. I shall know you now forever We are roped and kindly tethered In bonds that shall not sever, Love remains at the dying of the day While all must pass it shall stay. And love is my memory of you. |
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lol you'd think comments were precious the way you guys hold on to them
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Ta muchly Ellaine.That's quite helpfull and the fact you feel like "love is my memory of you" has been written before i take as a high compliment lol I always think as in songs that you hear for the first time and feel like you've always loved that toon so it is with poetry.If you feel you know it already then the poet has got something right lol
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