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5/3/2007 3:14 am |
The Challenge - Just for fun Write a poem incorporating all of the 10 words from the list. The words can be used in any order and may be changed to variations ie - Shop = Shops, Shopping, Shopper title your piece as you like. You can post your poem to your own blog, or post it here. If posting to your blog, then please post a message/link so we can all visit to read. Please do not post the challenge anywhere else. Thanks. I decided on a simpler word list this time  I'm looking forward to seeing what you all come up with. Have fun Muse Poetic Challenge 5 - Word list Glint, Neon, Brim, Asphalt, Line Bruise, Luck, Smoke, Salt, Tarnish Blog Muse2u 
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5/3/2007 6:51 am |
Dear Muse Ahhh yay, another..thanks okies.>>>>> I tripped upon the line falling to the asphalt. Like salt to a wound my luck was gone, As the bruise upon me stood out like a neon sign. I felt on the brim of tears. I watched as my skin began to tarnish. I hope I did ok..  ..more more... loving it "Oz" OzSummerBreeze
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5/3/2007 8:22 am |
Asphalt Flower You stand bruised and brave The smoke of your cigarette Hangs in salty Atlantic fog These lines of smiles This dimpled whiskered cheek What luck to have found An asphalt flower To see clearly From beneath that grimy brim A glint of honest love shining Neon from your blue eyes A love the ages will not Tarnish Earth Hostage
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 5/3/2007 9:47 am |
Leaving Las Vegas Breathing asphalt, the city's neon bruise glints dully off the smoke-lined sky. Brimful of whiskey, rubbing salt into the tarnished wound where my luck used to be, I know it's time to go.
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5/3/2007 1:09 pm |
A SILHOUETTE BY THE SEA Throwing glints on dark salty waters, Lines of city neon lights Shelter my lonely cigarette. Will its smoke hide my tear-brimmed eyes ? Where to shelter my bruised love ? Stamping the fag on the old tarnished asphalt, I wish you luck. Hi ...I am glad to be back among you all. SL Keep love in your heart ! SL
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5/3/2007 3:58 pm |
From under my salty brim I noticed a glint of a neon sign It read, Stay behind the line Too late I fell into freshly poured asphalt As luck would have it I bruised my ego and tarnished my reputation but at least I don't smoke. jiffybob?
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5/4/2007 1:42 am |
Gonna work on this one Muse.
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5/4/2007 2:20 am |
as we pave our roads with asphalt, heading for the brim, leaving neon signs behind. as our bruised lives our tarnished memories our salty tears make it crystal clear, once our tears in crystals will appear when we believe we ran out of luck, it's just our newly paved asphalt roads blur our view with solid smoke, and when we reach that final line we will look back and see it's not a neon sign we left behind not a tear not a road not the bruises or the smoke but a crystal and a glint and it shines it shines it shines
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5/4/2007 6:22 am |
Hi all, just wanted to say thanks to everyone who's added a challenge poem so far. They are all great. I'm having a busy day today, but I'll be back later to read your posts and comment Blog Muse2u
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5/4/2007 8:12 am |
Love your challenges!! I tried to shorten mine this time...to see if I could use one of the words per line.....will try to link but can't quite figure out how to do this... Her eyes tarnished with loss, peer out at a world bruised with smoke that swirls around the neon lights. Filled to the brim with sorrow that glints through her makeup, she struts a fine line salting the asphalt with her tears Luck, that capricious goddess, has touched someone else with her golden Midas touch. Wishing you happiness Misty Wishing you happiness Misty
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5/4/2007 11:48 am |
it was hard not to look at other replies before writing this, but i did it. this is what i came up with hugggssssssss tommie The asphalt, tarnished With fading lines Bruised from aged tires Speeding down the lanes Of winter salted roads Smoke butts, Laying in the gravel On the brim Tiny chips, glinting In the flash of neon lights Looking like precious stones No such luck.
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5/4/2007 12:05 pm |
Oz - Yes You did great with the challenge, and Ouch, I felt that one  lol. Been there, done that, and felt like a fool for falling over  lol. I'm glad you enjoyed the challenge. We'll do another one next week, so I hope you'll join in again Thanks for taking part.Earth Hostage - I love your poem. It took me to the ocean and I almost felt as if I had gone back in time too. For me, the poem has a historical feel. Great imagery, and I enjoyed reading I'm glad you took part Gower - I think maybe this is my new favourite of your poems. I really like the feel of the piece, and the quick scene you painted with so little words. Great work as always. Thanks for taking part Sunlover - Hi and Welcome to the challenge I hope you had fun with the word list. I like the mood of your poem. I felt as though I could have been standing there too Great work and thanks for joining in. I hope to see you take part in the next challenge Bob - Ha ha, another one that had me falling over lol. Your poems always make me smile, either in humour or with gladness at their loveliness Keep up the good work and thanks for entering the challenge again Riny - Glad you managed to work on it and leave us something beautiful to read Your poem made me think of the past and the future, and also of where abouts I'm standing on that road at the moment. Great piece. I very much enjoyed Misty - As always, I'm glad you enjoy the challenges. I love to read what everyone writes with the words. I like your poem. I could see a city girl amidst the urban sprawl, crying and nobody noticing  Great use of the word list. I enjoyed the imagery of the piece Thanks for taking part Blog Muse2u
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5/4/2007 12:53 pm |
Tommie - Hi and Welcome to the challenge. You must have been posting when I was writing my last reply above I'm so pleased you entered the challenge and I really like your poem. It reminded me of roads I've traveled, right down to the smoke butts And I agree, it's a pity they aren't gems for us to collect Great use of the word list, it's amazing how everyone can create something unique out of playing around with the same 10 words. Many thanks for taking part Blog Muse2u
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5/4/2007 2:27 pm |
smoke belching tires crossing the asphalt line, nearer and nearer to the crested brim, with salty sea below, the lucky coastal racer slowed his Neon down, grasping the tarnished cross that hung around his neck, with bruised ego he looks up into the glinting sun, "thankyou for saving me again, now we're having fun".
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5/4/2007 2:43 pm |
Hi Muse2u, Nice to meet you,too. I appreciate your visiting my blog. I admire the richness of your language expression. Thank you for gathering our souls in this poetic challenge. I am coming over and over to your blog to read the poems of my co-bloggers,they are so clever, intelligent and ingenious, I enjoy them immensely. SL Keep love in your heart ! SL
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5/4/2007 3:11 pm |
Contemplation Another drag off the cigarette; Swirling smoke encapsulates me, Watch flashing neon lights reflected Glinting off broken glass I see Falling from long deserted buildings; Remembering when “I” was part of “we”. Colors merging into vivid pools, Eyes brimming with forgotten dreams; Fractured tears captivate my spirit. Sounds aren’t the only way that screams Can be set free; fragile lives broken. If words would bring you back, I’d write you reams. You said only I could set you free But soon that phrase became the seeds. Too much to long for; too much to ask. Hope tarnished with unending needs; Bruised hearts shattered on empty beds. Counting each hunger shared on ivory beads. Sharp memory slices deep; gushing Arterial flow rimed with salt. Waiting as peace washes over me ‘Til only luck can call a halt. Your voice calling out in words of love Whispering sweet lies, “No, not your fault.” Step over crumbled asphalt breaking; The path you walked, a line so fine, Teetering between worlds divided Between us both, your heart and mine, Mistrust a keyword, dirge of death. Still, for one moment, tender love did shine. ***Sorry, I was wordy once again...just..when it comes, it comes all at once..and each word wants to be heard. Great challenge. Feel the passion, walk in peace, live in love....Ari 
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5/4/2007 7:19 pm |
muahhhh... happy weekend!
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5/5/2007 4:31 am |
oldhoglover - Well, I could almost feel the wind in my hair as I read your racers adventure Your poem created a great mind picture I'm glad you took part again. Thank you Sunlover - Hi again, and thank you. Yes, everyone always does a great job with the word list in these challenges. I for one always enjoy reading everyone's work I'm glad you like them too. I hope you will join in the next challenge. Have a lovely weekend Ari - No problem on the length of the poem. I'm glad the selected words inspired you to write I enjoyed reading your poem. It's sad and haunting. The emotion woven into the lines is quite powerful and the imagery strong. Great use of the list again. Thank you for adding to the challenge with your wonderful piece Belle - Hi there Nice to see you back, and wishing you a great weekend too Blog Muse2u
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5/5/2007 7:46 am |
Temptations And neoned in his agony Fate twists its cruelest blade Luck wedded to this tragedy His glinting hope’s slow fade Where once brimmed dreams so manifest Now salted pillars stand As Soddom’s ruins masked unrest And toppled at His hand The bruise of time creased in his face Some wisdom in those lines But summered asphalt-heat replaced And tarnished trust opines “That smoke-filled haze of habits past Won’t give you what you lack” With steel so sure, he lapses fast Edged in, still gazing back
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5/5/2007 3:02 pm |
Hi Lil I could really feel the addiction in this piece, and the character's struggle against it. Very powerful and great use of the word list. I'm very pleased you added a poem to the challenge. Thank you Blog Muse2u
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5/6/2007 6:23 pm |
A weave of tarnish dims the sky and clouds like dusky smoke rise in bruises that yield the light. Asphalt shadows line the hour, caught in the neon fist of the sun's final gaze. And as the salt of stars turns the luckless dust away, the steadfast twist of night takes their glint before they reach the brim of morning. Peace .. elaine67
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5/6/2007 6:27 pm |
A weave of tarnish dims the sky and clouds like dusky smoke rise in bruises that yield the light. Asphalt shadows line the hour, caught in the neon fist of the sun's final gaze. And as the salt of stars turns the luckless dust away, the steadfast twist of night takes their glint before they reach the brim of morning. Peace .. elaine67
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5/7/2007 4:22 am |
Mary - I love this one. It's very atmospheric and descriptive. I'm waiting for the street lights to come on (but not too soon...I want to see the stars) Great use of the word list. I hope you enjoyed the challenge. Thanks for taking part Blog Muse2u
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5/7/2007 6:21 am |
NEON HEART She fell upon an asphalt dream. Hard luck sang of love. The tune, a stolen melody from a neon heart. The sign fluttered on and off, and "Follow me", it said. She glided through the foyer, address a cold caress. While pools of eyes awash in smoke glanced around the bar. The lonely, throwing glints of hope, sat in brooding chairs. The tables, full of half made lines brimmed to bruise the soul. And there she found a tarnished knight, bleary eyes cast down. Swearing oaths and grinding salt for his steely tears. She shared an hour with Hard Luck’s song, and placed a quest in reach. Then one dull heart pulsed with glow when “Follow me.” she said. Muse2u © 2007 Blog Muse2u
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5/7/2007 7:55 am |
Mary: Wow, wow wow!!! "caught in the neon fist of the sun's final gaze"
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5/8/2007 8:31 am |
Late as usual . . . As luck would have it I was gone From neon lights and asphalt walks, With wide brimmed hat laid sweet upon My head, so bruised by tarnished talks. I tread the line now, dread the glint Of lucre in a cutthroat's hand. The wide road's salt, the smoky tint of sundown in my vanquished land.
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5/8/2007 1:25 pm |
Hi Scooter Really like the poem. It made me think of dangerous adventures and who we might meet on the road Nice to see you back. I hope you enjoyed the challenge. Thanks for taking part. Blog Muse2u
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